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thank you so much, everyone.
this poem. sucked so much out of me.please give it a chance.
- what do you think it's about?
- do the images convey the ideas alright?
- flow between stanzas, and even lines? they don't jump around too much, right?
- is there too much of a jump between the first two lines of the second last stanza?
- how cohesive is it, overall?
- does it still manage to possess the "beauty" that poetry is supposed to have? supposed
thanks. all comments are much appreciated